Media Violence - Informal Tone

Alright ... that seemed way longer than just one or two pages. But it was a good read.

While the piece was written using an informal tone, the overall structure and look of the piece was far more superior than the "Formal Tone" version. It is possible to tell the difference between the experiences of the two writers just by reading the first paragraph!

I can definitely say I would choose this piece over the previous one, for many reasons. The level of diction used here surpassed the language used by the first writer. The content included numerous detailed examples to support the writer's opinion of the matter. He introduced the topic on media violence through the ghastly incident in Virginia Tech, and quickly got into describing the real point at issue here. I also agree with his take on the topic, that society should use the violence displayed as a means to think about the issue and learn from it. However, before society is allowed to think about the topic, television networks and giants such as CNN or CBC often bring their own 'expert' to discuss the matter and offer their own opinion regarding it. And since it is an 'expert' opinion, many viewers accept it as the truth and do not probe into the matter any further.

The writer also structured his piece in a clear and organized manner. The piece started with the topic of Virgina Tech, continued with video games, Disney, and included the Iliad and gangs. Perhaps the most notable point the writer raised was regarding the Haw Paw Villa. Located in Singapore, many people used its content as a means to caution their young ones about consequences of committing bad deeds. As the writer pointed out, violence has been in existence for decades, and it is likely to remain in existence for centuries to come. The actions used by Singaporeans to warn their kids should be used as an example by people around the world. Instead of bitching about how horrible "media violence" really is, they should accept it as a part of their life and learn how to protect the rest of the society.


PS: I apologize for any profanity, or if I have offended anyone.


Sahil